Photo: Copyright Janet Webb
Daft Visor, The Dark Lord, fumed helplessly as his once feared Battle Fleet floundered on the over gorged waters of the former ice planet.
A combination of sweeping cuts to the Empire’s Defence budget, unprecedented global warming and forgetting to set his alarm clock, had resulted in his Elite Shop Troops coming to grief – in the shallow waters of a supermarket car park.
In order to retain some dignity, he had personally led the mission to remove the remaining coins from the ditched trolleys.
“I’ll take them myself” he told his embarrassed comrades, before spending all the proceeds on doughnuts.
This is my entry for the Friday Fictioneers Challenge, hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields – creating a story in 100 words, based on the photo prompt. Please view the other entries by clicking here.
Dear Steve,
I loved your beginning but couldn’t sort out the significance of the ending. This is probably just me, up late and needing to reread…..
Nope, reread it and still liked the opening but not sure where the ending went.
Aloha,
Doug
Thanks for the comment Doug. As for the ending, Daft Visor is trying to salvage some pride by ‘liberating’ the coins you sometimes have to put into shopping trolleys. As he has some money to spend, I just imagined him shrugging, and going into the supermarket for some “comfort food”.
Dear Steve,
Daft Visor…clever name. My dad used to check pay phones for coins. He often found a dime or two. Kudos for spelling doughnuts correctly. Over here in the States it’s been reduced to “donuts”.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Thanks, Rochelle. I did wonder if I’d spelt ‘doughnut’ correctly! In the U.K. we often use ‘Americanisms’, so I’ve probably seen both versions of the spelling.
Rochelle, my dad always did this, too, and found more coins than you’d think.
janet
I totally enjoyed this hilarious tale and understood immediately the meaning and necessity of purchasing donuts for the flagging troops.
Having shopped at Aldi’s, I immediately understood getting the coins back. I liked his name, too.
janet
Oh being bad even when it means petty revenge.. love thaat.
I like the idea of the Dark Lord reduced to collecting coins from shopping trolleys!
It made me chuckle, great job 🙂
Thanks. I enjoy doing the silly stories!
I give this an LOL…cause that’s what it gave me.
I always wonder if people will “get” a quirky story like this. Glad you did!