Eve’s choice was hard. On the surface different:
Promises of yellow sunshine from Jeff, his laughter like pearls on a string.
Robert always passionately red , with taste of sweetest wine.
Or the calmness of Steve, like blue sea he could soothe her in his arms.
But beyond the lure of their façades, they would just be dancing barefoot on meadows, which worked fine in summer sunshine, but come October and she needed a cottage with glowing embers in the hearth.
She turned and left, and stayed with Adam. Her paradise was in their home.
burning embers
when October comes
– paradise
Copyright – Rich Voza
Friday Fictioneers this week I decided to write a haibun. To me the picture was all about choices. But beyond the choices there is just emptiness, maybe the best choice is to turn back. This is 100 words including the haiku (which is not 575).
In Friday Fictioneers we write every week on the same picture, all under the strong guidance of Rochelle. Go to here page and read all the wonderful stories.
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September 25, 2013
Björn Rudbergs writings 
Oh how I loved this. Those choices are always hard to make, because those colors light up your life, pulse your blood, bring a smile.
So many people in your life can enhance it but it can also make you mad with choosing. Your beautiful words gave life to those (Very hard) decisions.
Ah thank you.. I had to think a long time before writing this..
that’s even more impressive, because you made it look effortless my friend. 🙂
A tale of four suitors.
I enjoyed. Thanks for sharing!
Thank you for reading and commenting.
very romantic – I like your story…there is so much between the lines.
You write great in English,( I just startet to join FF last week, my first language ist German, I have to improve)…Carmen
Writing poetry on the net is a great way to improve your English.. and I still learn a lot
Just think how it might have all played out if she’d gone with one of the others!
Beyond the bright facade there’s just emptiness..
Really enjoyed this passionate journey, and poetic phrasing. The choices… like so many we face in life… are not so clear. Well done! This really pulled me in.
I saw the picture as a metaphor for choices.. and what’s better than the most important choice of your life.
So true! I saw it as a metaphor for choices too, but chose to make mine the final choices… interesting. I really enjoyed the choices you offered.
Safe but wise choice. Good one.
Safe and boring… but dancing barefoot on winter meadows is not that fun.
Dear Björn,
In the end, safe and warm is best. Note: I think that should be “hearth” not “heath”.
Nice one.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Of course it’s hearth
Dear Bjorn,
This was very grounded in that particular reality held by a woman in need of a feathered nest. Great characterization, rhythm and story.
Aloha,
Doug
I have read a little bit too much Jane Austen lately 🙂
I love the way you used the colors as metaphors. Great job, as usual.
As we all know, Adam is always the best choice.
Ha… good for you 🙂
In the end its security a gal wants.
I believe so
This is very cool and the haiku is superb.
Many thanks 🙂
Smooth writing and deeply felt emotions. Once again, you come up with a winner. Terrific job!
Sounds like Eve is a wise woman. Lots of choices out there, each with strong points. But Eve knows well where her paradise is. Great story.
Is this East of Eden or North by Northwest? She must have been quite a dish to have so many suitors.
I agree with Russell–she sounds like a married woman on a spree and her adventures sound like a single girl’s dream. As always, Bjorn, a good story.
Great work! You made it even tougher on yourself. Way to shine.
Scott
Mine: http://kindredspirit23.wordpress.com/2013/09/25/friday-fictioneers-door-number-two-horror-pg13-92713/
Oh boy! She had some pretty wonderful choices, but I like the one she picked! What a heartwarming story!!
I like the pace, the twist and the conflict of this story.
Really lovely – and the colours woven throughout the story give it a great rhythm.
love the story and the extra haiku to finish – dinner to dessert. thanks!
Very nice, very lovely. Life as it should be.
So poetic and lovely, Bjorn. Paradise can be found in safety and warmth. This fits with the change in seasons right now. Well done.
A sweet story of our temptations, so many opportunities to screw up our lives for a moments pleasure, but finally coming to our senses.
i didn’t know eve was such a player 🙂 got a whole new respect for her. but seriously, i love your haibun, lovely descriptions and depth. it’s true, in the end, a girl’s gotta have safety and security 🙂
Right choice by Eve. Girls are like that, aren’t they?