Friday Fictioneers 30th August 2013 hosted by Rochelle Wisoff Fields
THE CHALLENGE:
Write a one hundred word story that has a beginning, middle and end.
THE KEY:
Make every word count.
Photo by Dawn M Miller
The Last Supper (100 words)
Lucy took the crumpled receipt from her purse and read it again. Rutter’s Jewellers $3995.
Before today she had suspected, but now she knew for certain. Richard was a cheat; the fool had left the receipt in his pocket.
She stopped at the store to pick up the rat poison, before returning home to cook him his final meal.
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Richard couldn’t wait to give Lucy the necklace. After this, she’ll know just how much I love her, he thought, opening the front door. The delicious smell of his favourite stew welcomed him home. Maybe It will wait until after dinner.
jwdwrites 
Aww poor Richard. Silly Lucy. Always ask if there’s something they need to say first 😉
Great story
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After that they just stopped talking… 🙂
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I have no idea why? Maybe the spice in the food was slightly different
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Or maybe their mouths were full?
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Short yet super effective. This reminds me of Lamb to the Slaughter.
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I haven’t read that. Thanks for your kind words. 🙂
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:] It’s a short story by Roald Dahl. It’s an amazing short story because it’s as though these stories are coming out through his alter-ego. :p
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I will have a look at that, thanks 🙂
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Maybe he would decide to tell her before dinner
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If only… 🙂
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She’s never going to get away with it using rat poison.
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Maybe it’s because she thinks he’s a love rat. 🙂
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Nice job…Good to see you again.
Tom
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Thanks Tom, it’s good to see you too. 🙂
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Now there’s a breakdown in communications to end all breakdowns. Well done.
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Thanks Sandra. 🙂
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Oh blimey, wadda mistaka ta maka!
I thought it was a good story and then I saw more words under the stars – it became a great story!
Nice one, great ending!
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Cute O’Henry like tale. She will certainly be sorry, but not as sorry as he will be…
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Oh, talk about a couple who needs to COMMUNICATE!!
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Sorry Carrie, I missed your comment! Thanks for stopping by. 🙂
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Damn, I hate when that happens!
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🙂
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🙂
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A delicious twist. Jealousy with a pinch of chives and mint.
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This is like “The Gift” in reverse–or at least twisted. You did a very good job telling a dark and sad story.
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Oops – I meant “The Gift of the Magi.”
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Dear JWD,
oh, how i wish there was a ‘love’ button. What a perfect little story all wrapped up in the bow of your words. Still shaking my head with wonderment. Great job.
Aloha,
Doug
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Thank you so much Doug, what an incredibly generous thing to say. 🙂
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Dear JWD,
O. Henry is looking down on you and smiling. I’m smiling, too. Well done. Applause!
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thanks Rochelle, but I am embarrassed to admit I had to google O Henry! 🙂
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It’s okay, JWD. Glad you took the time to do so. He’s always been a favorite of mine. Try finding some of his stories and reading. Great fun with a twist at the end. He was the master and has been a favorite of mine since childhood.
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I will, thanks. 🙂
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Strongly plotted story. Reminded me of the Gift Of The Magi by O.Henry and it had that same kind of devastating punch ending. Ron
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I guess the moral of the story is to voice your suspicions instead of murder. 🙂 Brilliant story.
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iik that was a hasty decision… a little bit like a Roald Dahl story.
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