Welcome to Friday Fictioneers where each week close to 100 people participate in a flash fiction challenge based on a photo prompt.
This week’s photo ~ Copyright: Me!
And now my 100 word story:
I couldn’t believe he was finally going to ask me. This wasn’t the way I had it planned out in my head but I didn’t care, he was finally going to ask me!
He had brought me to this jewelry counter under some false pretense; his son was going to ask his girlfriend to marry him, he wanted help to pick out a ring.
Okay, did he think I was stupid?
It really didn’t matter.
The princess cut with two diamonds on each side.
Sure, I will try it on to “see how it looks”
Whaddaya know, a perfect fit.
The Day After 
I can only imagine how disappointed she would be if it turns out she really was just helping his son buy a ring!
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Awwww, now i feel bad
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Oh dear, I’ve got a bad feeing about this… Nicely done and great photo.
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Thanks Sandra, on both counts 🙂
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great story. i could actually feel her excitement. but uh-oh… i just hope the ring is really for her. 🙂
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aaand i just saw your title and my heart broke for her. poor silly girl 🙂
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Maybe next time. 😉
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I’ve got a bad feeling about this too! Well-written!
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Thank you.
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Oh, if only it twer so…
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If only…
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I got the feeling something may not be just right as well, lol. Great piece 🙂
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Thank you.
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She has the wishful thinking going gangbusters, but I fear it will only lead to disappointment.
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One man’s junk is another man’s treasure. I’m j/s)
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Poor lady. Miscommunication indeed! Great story though.
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Thanks Jackie
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Dear Dawn,
There’s gonna be a heartache tonight, I know. Touching to the point of a pit in my stomach.
BTW, great picture. Thanks for sharing it.
shalom,
Rochelle
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Thank YOU for sharing it. It gave me a little thrill. 😉
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Any chance the “miscommunication” is the ruse to get her there? Hate to see a sad ending for such a great prompt photo.
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You can’t help but feel her hope will soon be crushed. Nicely constructed.
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Thank you.
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Funny how everyone seems to think this lady is in for a disappointment, or is that why it is called miscommunication? Good story Dawn. 🙂
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Thanks J
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I’m not sure I like your narrator – but then, it doesn’t mean she doesn’t deserve happiness… Or is that the point?! Thanks for the photo prompt! 🙂
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Thank YOU!
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Hopes dashed, she went in search of a Mrs. Fields for a BiG cookie and a diet Coke. (That’s what I would have done anyway.) Good prompt. I just didn’t have time this week to join in on the fun. So, I comment instead.
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Nice of you to comment Honie. We will miss your contribution, they are always entertaining.
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Oh, what a kick in the teeth! I wonder if he even realizes that she’s seeing a future together. The fact he has a son old enough to propose tells me this is a second relationship…maybe he just wants some fun
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Men can be so dense.
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Think he really means it and he is shopping for his son..good one:)
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Thanks nightlake.
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Nice ambiguity. I still think she has a shot … maybe … probably not! But very good story.
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Thanks Perry, she has a shot, he just hasn’t figured it out yet.
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I think Carrie hit the nail on the head with her comments. If Mr. Wonderful is like most men, he’s not much of a mind reader. Nice story, Dawn.
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Exactly!!!!
Thanks Ray.
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I so hope she is right about this. Great, enthusiastic, thrilled, excited voice (hopefully not soon to be disapointed).
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Sounds like a pretty ring though, either way. 😉
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Hopefully.
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That’s very wishful thinking….but your title says it all.
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Our dear friend Aloha Doug (see next commenter) said it all when he said “The title adds another 100 words”
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Dear Dawn,
Thanks for the pic and this fine story. As an earlier commenter wrote, I too have a bad feeling about this one.
Aloha,
Doug
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Aaahhh, I’ve been married a couple of times. Sometimes we thank God for unanswered prayers. 😉
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Oops … without the title there could still be hope… and thank you for the picture 🙂
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Than you for thanking me. 🙂
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I must be an optimist, because I read it with hope. That ring just might be hers. Miscommunication could work in her favor.
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Absolutley!
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Impressive how you use the title to add a whole other chapter to the story.
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I’m honestly not very good with titles but I put an effort into it with this challenge.
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Oh dear, I have a feeling she’s going to be very upset…
Great story Dawn and I loved the title.
Thanks for the photo too
Dee
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Thank you Dee.
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