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Behind The Flicking Lamps- Friday Fictioneers 3/29

Posted on March 28, 2013 by boomiebol

After been MIA for a few weeks, I am back this week for another Friday Fictioneer per Rochelle. This week’s image is also courtesy of her.

I came up with a short story that might be a tad vague or doesn’t say much…and yet somehow it does…please feel free to comment and offer constructive criticisms. As always join in the fun. THANK YOU ALWAYS AND HAVE A GREAT EASTER.

Image courtesy of Rochelle

The kitchen remained just as it had been that tragic night…frozen in time, December 27th 2008 to be precise. Everything else moved on with life’s unpredictable pace, everything but this room.

Dimly lit and seemingly innocent, Sarah- Jane and her sisters made sure the room was secluded, and undisturbed…it took threats, screams, yells, and protests but they got their wish…no one dared look in the room let alone enter it. It was under preservation they said; just as their mother had wished it to be in her will…just as she had wanted it to be after that night…

A deadly and untold secret perfectly masked behind the room’s flicking lamps…

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sheila on March 28, 2013 at 7:51 am said:

I totally admire how you say so much with so few words. I love the suspense.

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- boomiebol on April 3, 2013 at 2:30 pm said:
  
  Thanks so much :). Very glad you enjoyed it.
  
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Alastair on March 28, 2013 at 8:01 am said:

oooh love the implications in that. Love it 🙂

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- boomiebol on April 1, 2013 at 2:03 pm said:
  
  Very glad. Thanks always Alastair 🙂
  
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silentlyheardonce on March 28, 2013 at 9:05 am said:

Welcome back my love. A well written story.

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- boomiebol on April 1, 2013 at 2:03 pm said:
  
  Thank you so much
  
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happinessisnotadisease on March 28, 2013 at 9:06 am said:

Sounds like a good introduction to a mystery short story.

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- boomiebol on April 1, 2013 at 2:02 pm said:
  
  Thanks so much dear. how have you been?
  
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sustainabilitea on March 28, 2013 at 9:41 am said:

Welcome back, Bommie, and a blessed Easter to you, too.

janet

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- boomiebol on March 29, 2013 at 1:19 pm said:
  
  Thank you so much.
  
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readinpleasure on March 28, 2013 at 10:39 am said:

I enjoyed this 🙂

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- boomiebol on March 29, 2013 at 1:18 pm said:
  
  I am very glad, thanks so much 🙂
  
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Sandra on March 28, 2013 at 10:59 am said:

Longing to know what happened. Nicely done.

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russtowne on March 28, 2013 at 12:01 pm said:

Wonderfully eery, haunting, and mysterious!
Russ

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Björn Rudberg (brudberg) on March 28, 2013 at 12:43 pm said:

I’m not sure I want to know what really had happened. Really chilling for a person with my weird fantasy.

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- boomiebol on March 29, 2013 at 1:18 pm said:
  
  lol…
  
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AriadneAranea on March 28, 2013 at 3:47 pm said:

Very mysterious! 🙂 x

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- boomiebol on March 29, 2013 at 1:17 pm said:
  
  Smiles…I think we all like a little mystery :). Thanks so much for stopping by
  
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Resa McConaghy on March 28, 2013 at 3:57 pm said:

Excellent! It’s quite the teaser!

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- boomiebol on March 29, 2013 at 1:17 pm said:
  
  🙂
  
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Rochelle Wisoff-Fields on March 28, 2013 at 5:23 pm said:

Dear Boomie,
This does sound like the intro to a larger story. Nice one. And welcome back. I’ve missed you.
shalom,
Rochelle

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- boomiebol on March 29, 2013 at 1:17 pm said:
  
  Thanks so much. I have missed you as well, thanks for being a great host.
  
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LuAnn on March 28, 2013 at 6:58 pm said:

Lots of intrigue and mystery swirling around.

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- boomiebol on March 29, 2013 at 1:16 pm said:
  
  I agree :). Thanks so much. Have a blessed Easter
  
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deanabo on March 28, 2013 at 7:26 pm said:

I want to know more! Terrific writing.

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- boomiebol on March 29, 2013 at 1:15 pm said:
  
  Thanks so much
  
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kindredspirit23 on March 28, 2013 at 7:29 pm said:

Nothing wrong with that. I am wondering about “that night” but I imagine everyone is…

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- boomiebol on March 29, 2013 at 1:15 pm said:
  
  I think I am wondering as well lol. Thanks so much
  
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kindredspirit23 on March 28, 2013 at 7:29 pm said:

Mine:http://kindredspirit23.wordpress.com/2013/03/27/friday-fictioneers-darkness-comes-genre-horror-pg/
Scott

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Zen and Genki on March 28, 2013 at 8:27 pm said:

Mysterious…love it! (And good call using Rochelle’s image too!)

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- boomiebol on March 29, 2013 at 1:15 pm said:
  
  Thanks so much Anne
  
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Swirling Turnip on March 28, 2013 at 8:57 pm said:

No! Am I to never learn the secret? Way to suck me in. Nicely done.

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- boomiebol on April 9, 2013 at 3:47 pm said:
  
  HAHAHA. Thanks so much
  
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H.L. Pauff (@HLPauff) on March 28, 2013 at 10:01 pm said:

What happened that night???? Reminds me of this sealed room in a childhood friend’s home. I always wondered why it was sealed and what was behind there.

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- boomiebol on March 29, 2013 at 1:15 pm said:
  
  Oh that sounds strange… thanks so much for stopping by
  
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kz on March 28, 2013 at 11:22 pm said:

shrouded in mystery!!! pleeeaaasse let me in on the secret. ^^

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- boomiebol on March 29, 2013 at 1:13 pm said:
  
  Haha, thanks kz
  
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RoSy on March 29, 2013 at 12:58 am said:

Hi Twinnie – Nice to see you back here 🙂
A room of mystery…

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- boomiebol on March 29, 2013 at 1:14 pm said:
  
  You are simpluy the best Twinnie, thanks so much. How was Green Day?
  
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nightlake on March 29, 2013 at 1:45 am said:

wonder about the secret! well written

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- boomiebol on March 29, 2013 at 1:13 pm said:
  
  Thanks so much 🙂
  
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Parul on March 29, 2013 at 6:03 am said:

I am very curious as to what secret lies in the kitchen! You built good suspense there.
Nicely done Boomie!

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- boomiebol on April 1, 2013 at 2:02 pm said:
  
  Thanks much Parul
  
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Shreyank on March 29, 2013 at 10:44 am said:

much remains to be told i guess !

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- boomiebol on March 29, 2013 at 1:10 pm said:
  
  Indeed. Thanks so much for stopping by
  
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Joe Owens on March 29, 2013 at 12:44 pm said:

Oh the explanation not made allows us to craft our own menacing plot direction. Very good!

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- boomiebol on March 29, 2013 at 1:10 pm said:
  
  Thank you so much Joe 🙂
  
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petrujviljoen on March 29, 2013 at 1:17 pm said:

Sad, scary, heartbreaking.

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- boomiebol on March 29, 2013 at 1:22 pm said:
  
  Thanks so much for reading
  
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elenesallinger on March 29, 2013 at 1:45 pm said:

Very nicely done, both sinister and reverent!

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- boomiebol on April 3, 2013 at 2:32 pm said:
  
  Thank you so much
  
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Brian Benoit on March 29, 2013 at 8:33 pm said:

Glad you’re back, Boomie – and I definitely don’t think this is too vague. I feel like the actions of the sisters keep it grounded, and even though there’s a pretty deep mystery about what happened and why the room needs to be preserved, we at least feel like it’s something that could be explained if we read on. Nice job!

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- boomiebol on April 1, 2013 at 2:02 pm said:
  
  Thank you so much Brian, very nice of you to say.
  
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David Stewart on March 30, 2013 at 1:53 am said:

Very cool. You created the creepy mood perfectly. 🙂

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- boomiebol on April 1, 2013 at 2:01 pm said:
  
  Thanks so much David 🙂
  
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zookyworld on March 30, 2013 at 4:45 am said:

I like how you described the scene and gave just a bit of info, and then you let the reader’s imagination take off from there.

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- boomiebol on April 3, 2013 at 2:33 pm said:
  
  Thanks so much. Glad you enjoyed this
  
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wmqcolby on March 30, 2013 at 4:55 am said:

Great to see you, Boomie! I’ve been doing the same thing, sort of.

Nice story! Has some potential for a bigger one, I agree with Rochelle.
Great seeing you again!

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- boomiebol on April 9, 2013 at 3:49 pm said:
  
  Great seeing you as well. Life’s gotten so busy lately, but I am going to try really hard to keep up with my writing and Friday Fictineer.
  
  Thanks so much for stopping by and I am so sorry about the late response.
  
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boomiebol on April 1, 2013 at 2:01 pm said:

Great to see you too. Thanks so much for stopping by to read, very much appreciated. Hope you had a great Easter.

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Penny L Howe on April 1, 2013 at 2:45 pm said:

So very well done here boomie. All the right elements with very few words, conveying exactly the right things for a micro story! 🙂

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- boomiebol on April 9, 2013 at 3:51 pm said:
  
  Thanks so much
  
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anelephantcant on April 1, 2013 at 4:25 pm said:

Very elegant, very atmospheric.
Loved it.

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- boomiebol on April 9, 2013 at 3:51 pm said:
  
  I am very glad, thanks so much
  
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Lora Mitchell on April 1, 2013 at 4:43 pm said:

Ah….a mystery/thriller in the making. Would love to know more. Welcome back, Boomie. Hope you had a lovely Easter.

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- boomiebol on April 9, 2013 at 3:52 pm said:
  
  Thanks so much. I think I do better with short stories…I fear if I wrote long stories I will go off track or get all the grammar tied in knots lol.
  
  Thanks a lot
  
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Lora Mitchell on April 1, 2013 at 4:46 pm said:

HiBoomie…I just left a comment but don’t see it so will repeat. First of all, Welcome back. Hope you had a nice Easter. I see a mystery/thriller in the making here…and would love to know more.

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- boomiebol on April 9, 2013 at 3:46 pm said:
  
  Thank you so much. I think the see the other message. Yes, I had a nice Easter, quiet but too short lol.
  
  Thanks always, I hope you are having a great week
  
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StacyMichelle on April 2, 2013 at 8:13 pm said:

Outstanding, Boomie!

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- boomiebol on April 9, 2013 at 3:45 pm said:
  
  Thanks so much Stacy. Very much appreciated!
  
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Lindy Lee on April 14, 2013 at 5:53 pm said:

Those lamps go with the atmosphere your writing here creates…

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simon7banks on April 23, 2013 at 3:08 am said:

Very Gothic!

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- boomiebol on April 23, 2013 at 9:31 am said:
  
  🙂
  
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