rochellewisoff FRIDAY FICTIONEERS PRESENTS FOR YOUR READING ENJOYMENT (OR NOT) 100 WORDS (OR SLIGHTLY OVER) BY YOURS TRULY ON THE BELOW… THINKING CAP ON RAMBLY!
“Rochelle, we shouldn’t be here, what if they come home?”
“Ted, stop panicking, you’re such a wimp”.
“They left the lamps on, it’s daylight outside, who does that, please?”
Rochelle studied the contents of the kitchen, running her fingers over the bench, the empty jars and gazed out of the window.
This would be her house someday, when she grew up and married Ted.
Pimply skinned and 13, Ted was oblivious to her agenda.
“Please, he pleaded, can we just go, it’s freaking me out”.
Rochelle paused staring at the lamps.
Perhaps I need to marry someone willing to take risks.
“OK already”.
104 words (oops)
For: 
Ramblings From A Mum 
Great story! I wonder though what Ted’s agenda was, going with her to the empty house?
Claire
🙂 I think he was just dragged along for the ride….
Thanks Claire for reading!
I wonder whose house it is and how those mischievous kids got in. Shh…I’ve never told my husband about Ted. 😉 Fun story.
Shalom,
Rochelle
that would only be told if it were 150 words 🙂 Your secret is safe – and thank you 🙂
Exactly what I was thinking, Rochelle. This will be quite a revelation. 🙂
janet
Janet re – Ted or getting into the house? 🙂 Thanks for reading.
I meant Ted, but maybe both. Although after reading Rochelle’s story, maybe only Ted. 🙂
janet
🙂 I can understand Rochelle’s feelings… about the kitchen… and maybe about what she needs. Great take on the prompt. And so quickly too!
I Thank you so much Sandra, I seemed to be racing tonight, did two in an hour, also now I’ll probably hit the wall!
That’s the way it goes! 🙂
great story with true to form pre-teens
Lamps on during the day gives it just the right element of creepy
Hello, welcome and thank you for the visit and read, appreciated. Think Ted will always be a wimp though 😦
Great story 🙂 I like the way the girl is up for anything, but the boy just wants to run 🙂
Hi and welcome Alastair and thank you! …hmm I won’t say ‘typical’ then? 😉
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I don’t think Ted’s a whimp. I think he has a healthy sense for wanting to stay out of trouble. Won’t marry him though.
Hi Petru and welcome. Hmm your possibly right..it’s the ‘girls’ who are ring leaders usually. Nah he’s way too young still anyway 😉 Thanks for reading and visiting!
good story. I identified with Ted. Rochelle needs someone like Rhett Butler from Gone With The Wind to tame her. I prefer the quiet and simple life.
I am chuckling over here…a female that needs being tamed? Surely you jest 😉 then again if it was Rhett I’d be up for taming myself! thanks for popping over and reading – appreciated.
hahaha loved this story ^^ could just imagine the characters. I don’t think Ted’s too wimpy, just cautious I suppose. but nah, wont marry him either. ^^ the girl’s a bit on the crazy side, love it
Welcome kz – I thought it a little different than the serious or dark prose and poetry…hmm a couple have thought that about Ted…:-) Thanks for your comments and reading. 🙂
If you don’t mind one bit of grammar info, when you address someone by name when writing, you need to use a comma or commas to separate the name from the rest of the sentence such as, “Rochelle, have you told your husband about Ted?” Or, “No, Janet, I haven’t had that pleasure yet.”
janet
I’m right on it – thank you Janet any info welcomed. I had written 2 side by side tonight and my brain and fingers are a little weary ..off to correct 🙂
Poor Ted! Guys are light years behind the girls. Great story. 🙂
dare I say it …sad but true JW, thank you very much appreciated 🙂
Oh dear, Ted doesn’t stand a chance does he?
Hi Em, nope she’s too strong for him methinks 😉 Thanks for reading. 🙂
Heh heh…you’ll get your just desserts methinks fairly soon!
😉 possibly..maybe… 🙂
Are girls always like that? Great story 🙂
fickle? some are…yes and thank you RG 🙂
Fun and cute story. Love how you put Rochelle and Ted together.
Thank you muchly ..wasn’t the plan, but it sprung to mind straight away 🙂
The Ted I know is a lot better.. but of course it’s not him, just his name. 🙂
I loved Rochelle’s comment!
Very fresh take on the prompt. The house does seem ominous. I think Ted is right. They better get out!
Welcome Parul thank you for reading. We may have to wait and see what transpires…. 😉 Keep a look out.
Those beautiful young gals can persuade us fellas to take all kinds of risks and lead us into the most awkward spots. Ted was just allowing his heart to lead his head. Aren’t all good love stories like that?
Us girls do have the propensity to shall I say ‘run rings’ round the guys..we were born to it 😉 Yes you are right Ted was somewhat blinded…but I think Rochelle is a little bit more wicked. Thanks you so much Joe for reading 🙂
Oh a lot of Ted in me too… and it’s so fun to read these stories… 🙂
Oh BR really? I agree sometimes squeezing into 100 words is very difficult but makes us edit and edit and as Rochelle says ‘make every word count’. Thanks for reading 🙂
Reminds me of a few girls I knew as a kid and they say boys are the crazy ones! Nice Job.
Tom
Nope Tom I think girls are far crazier than the boys, at least some of them 😉 Appreciate you reading.
LOL! Poor Ted! 😉
Alas poor Ted we know many like them well. Thanks Chookas 🙂 xx
Creates questions…making reader want the rest of the story.
Thanks Claudia – I may embellish a little more later on but it won’t be in FF – appreciated you reading. 🙂
I love the suspense!
Thank you – it is kinda weird though as you and others have picked up on that..but I wasn’t really aiming for it as I wrote, on re-read I see why people are saying that though 🙂
Great story. That girl is ambitious, already picking out her house and her man. I think if I were Ted, I’d want to run too. 🙂
I like ya’ thinking 😉 thanks David for reading.
lol. very imaginative. Wonder what Ted thinks about your description of him
ooops hadn’t thought of that (sorry Ted) and thank you for reading. 🙂
Teenage Ted and a pimply Rochelle, eh? Great story – loads of fun!
lol pimply Ted . Thanks for the visit, the read and the comment ela – appreciated 🙂
I just read Alastairs take on it. Wow, that’s amazing the 2 diffferent stories. I so loved the picture and the stories. hugs xxxxxxx
I love these challenges for that reason, we read so many different takes on one pic…fun fun fun 🙂 xxx
Very nicely done. I loved the evolution of Rochelle’s mindset right there in that defining moment.
Thank you Elene yes one determined young lady that Rochelle 🙂 Thanks for reading.
LOL, the secrets one learns through Friday Fictioneers 🙂 Who knew Rochelle and ted knew each other WAY back when!!
Alas the secret is no longer 😉 Thanks for reading Carrie.
I’d say Ted failed the test!
I’m right with you on that HL- thanks for reading.:-)
This one made me smile — I would’ve been as oblivious as Ted was! I like this back and forth between the partners in crime. And a fun title for your story. Fun stuff!
Hello Zooky and welcome. Hmmm most males are aren’t they? 😉 Thank you so much for reading and commenting I really do appreciate it 🙂
I’m certain there will be a lot more for Rochelle and Ted to learn about each other before they decide to tie any knot.
Denmother
That’s if Rochelle keeps with him 😉 Thanks for visiting and commenting Denmother appreciated.
The best thing about FF is I get to see how so many thoughts come up for a same prompt. Great story 🙂
That is the thing, it’s being able to read everyone’s story from a different perspective using the same prompt- all the ideas running through our heads. Thanks for reading mine.
Interesting twist in your little tale. I remember sneaking into empty houses, but I never snuck into my own. That would be weird. She is young yet, and can find someone with a better neighbourhood!
You comment made me chuckle Lindaura yes weird and dare we say awkward sneaking into your own house (unless of course it’s 3am in the morning..)
Yes I think so too, her ‘values’ are a little over the shop.. thanks for popping over and reading- appreciated.
Oh this is just too cute!
I thank you for dropping by and reading LV 🙂