the red sea – friday fictioneers zombies zeds 24
This story is prompted for Friday Fictioneers – kindly hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields Come try your hand at a 100 word story. Here is today’s photo prompt
The bomb has exploded wounding the hive. Shielded from death by the monsters between Reaper and the explosion, Reaper must escape to survive.
Amidst fire and smoke Reaper wobbled toward the morning light, the revealed exit. Nearby, Zombies stumbled crawled and raged. They slashed walls, one another as the wounded hive belched pain and fury. Back against the wall inching toward light Reaper’s pistol barked calling the shots, one, nine, thirteen, reload, again.
Fresh air, just thirteen steps down when he beheld the mass of enraged frothing zombies outside.
Reaper dropped to his knees spent.
Opera he thought gazing out. Madman’s makeshift pickup with snowplow, sawed off roof, and leaf spring catapult cradling the world ball, clove a gaping path through toward him.
The previous story of Reaper’s adventures is here: story 23
The World Ball showed up in Friday fictioneers some time ago: story 17 and the picture resides here
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Yay for Reaper. I was convinced he wasn’t going to make it this time. Like the idea of the snow plough, where will Reaper end up next?
thanks for stopping by, I guess the next prompt helps decide.
Gotta love the crazy guy in a crazy car coming to the rescue
I know – the image of Madman welding the snow plow and then smashing through the sea of zombies…
I like it. I had been thinking about it for some time just waiting for a car prompt. This one was perfect!
whew, the Reaper did it. ah, my ridiculous efforts ^^ no one does zombies like you do ^^
thanks — I think you can make a zombie tale rock!
Phew! I wondered where the car was going to come into it. Exciting, action-packed stuff.
Do you need an ‘and’ in this line: They slashed walls, one another as the wounded hive belched pain and fury.
Thanks Claire — yes, the and was a sacrifice to cutting the word count. I am always glad when you stop by!
Saved.. But what about the girl.. The girl 🙂
she’s waiting – but unless the hive dies her future in uncertain.
“the wounded hive belched pain and fury” – that I thought was an awesome line!
And I love Madman’s entry too!
Very dramatic. Ace work!
Thanks Parul – I am very glad you enjoyed it!
i would never have the stamina to continue writing like this. just the constant fighting and running and escaping would drain me, so that’s a credit to you for sure.
in this line: “Amidst fire and smoke Reaper wobbled toward” you could use a comma after “smoke.”
in this line: “Nearby, Zombies stumbled crawled and raged.” grammatically, you need commas after stumbled and crawled. however, for style, the lack of commas makes it rushed and in panic. was that intentional? if so, it works.
Thanks, I actually had them in and as you mentioned it made it more controlled.
I always appreciate your input.
No, not the zombies!! I’m going to have nightmares now. Luckily your hero is on top of things.
Fear not fair lady… 🙂
Great piece of action here. Personally, I’d sprinkle in a few more commas, but I really enjoyed this. I remember the world ball!
thanks — punctuation is the bane of my existence. Glad you liked the story.
Dear Bill,
The idea of frothing Zombies made me want to run. Glad Madman showed up with the snow plow. How timely as I look a snow plowed mountains of white on my neighborhood streets. Should I be looking for Zombies?
You’ve sucked me in, you know. Can’t wait to find out more.
shalom,
Rochelle
Hi Rochelle – I think you are safe, KC is the last sanctuary. 🙂
Just wait until you see what Madman did to Doug’s World Ball. 🙂
Now that I want to see. 😉
I worry about you sometimes, but it doesn’t stop me coming back for the next thrilling installment !
ah, reaper escapes once again. Love his get-away ride’s description.
thanks — I was hoping a jury rigged snowplow would show up in the prompts and got my wish!
And I add a “Yay!” for Madman–sounds like the cavalry has arrived just in the nick of time..Good action here, Bill.
thanks VB – appreciate it
I love the description of the pick-up that he finds.
thanks — I think my uncle had one like it 🙂
Reaper as the John McLain of the Zombie-infested world!! You go, Reaper! (Sawed-off needs a hyphen.) I love “clove” a path.
janet
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Yes! He got out. Most excellent. Now I want to know about the girl. A little romance perhaps?
she’s still infected and waning under the hive’s influence. She can’t be free until the hive is eliminated. 🙂
Yay! I knew he was invincible. You’re late by the way… 😉
thanks Sandra — I claim a one day reprieve for my birthday 🙂