This is my submission for this week’s Friday Fictioneers that is ably hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields.
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Below is the picture prompt for this week and below that is my story.
Picture copyright Beth Carter
On Wheels
Stu stopped to catch his breath, bent, placed his hands on his knees and panted.
There was a car parked a few metres ahead. An old convertible. He walked up to it. His heart sank. Up close, the car looked partly home-assembled. A hand-written sign in it declared that the car would run. Stu wasn’t so sure. Why the need to write the sign? To convince who? Potential buyers?
At the moment, Stu had limited options and little to lose by trying the car. If he could hot-wire it, he would hopefully be better placed to outpace the pursuing hounds.
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100 words
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Very clever with him being in hot pursuit. Of all cars to stumble upon to assist him in his getaway….
Fugitives cannot be too choosy
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Excellent! He’s got a couple of seconds to decide…no choice…pressure’s on…
yep, no one would wanna ride this unless it’s a life and death situation.lol great story, Baba!
Good luck to Stu! 🙂 I think he’s going to need it.
Stu seems very excited about his find. Hope it works out for him.
Well it’s probably easy to hot wire. No chip keys on this old maid.
I have this hilarious mental image of him rattling and banging along a road at 20mph with dogs running just behind him.
LOLLL! Hopefully the dogs will be scared of jumping into the car 🙂
I suspect the hounds might actually outpace poor Stu and this hot-rod.
Not the best bet for a getaway car, but better than nothing. Nicely done,
I don’t think much of his chances…!
Dear Abraham,
Nothing like grabbing the most conspicuous car on the road. I wish Stu luck in getting it out of its parking place. Fun take on the prompt.
shalom,
Rochelle
not hounds! they never quit. good luck to him. well done.
Oh he better try a car that is not so unique. I have a feeling his pursuers will identify him easily in this jalopy. Plus there is no cover should the bullets start flying.
I’m not sure that car can outrun the hounds. Great take on the prompt 🙂
“pursuing hounds” I like that phrase.
Scott
Cool twist to this story. Run, Stu, run! I’m rooting for him.
Any port in a storm, or in this case, any car will do if you’re being hunted. I just hope he got it going. Nice one.
“What cha gona do when they come for you” – couldn’t help sing this in my head whilst reading 🙂
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Tough choice… his fatigued legs or the farce of a car! A rock or a hard place… decisions decisions!
May survival triumph. Interesting piece.
Ooohhh, I’m dying to know if it works!
Sure, who’s gonna report this heap missing?!
Cripes! Sounds like he’s desperate enough to try even this chunk of junk. Though sometimes the old and simple machines have less to go wrong.
He must be innocent. A real criminal would hold out for a better ride!
now if it was the car in my story, he would make it home free! 😉 good story, hounds are hard to fool….
your first line puts the reader right there with Stu, watching him and wanting to know why he’s running. nice hook.
Excellent, Abraham. I enjoyed the bit about the sign. That is a good question, isn’t it? (I mean in real life, too). I’m betting the owner is tired of having to answer that question. You incorporated that into your seamlessly.
Juicy!!! Why are there hounds after Stu? I love a good chase story. I hope you expand it.
Interesting, perfectly paced, and very well-written. I also love your first two lines, though the rest were great as well. I really felt inside Stu’s head! My only suggestion would be “To convince WHOM?”
Great story, Abraham!
I’ve never been sure when to use ‘who’ and ‘whom’ Thanks 🙂
This probably isn’t a full explanation, but “whom” is used in direct object situations, “who” in subject/noun situations… You might ask, “WHO did it?” or “To WHOM was it done?”
Thanks! That explanation should be enough for most situations.
Great take on the prompt, Abraham. Love the way you included the hand-written sign. Maybe Stu could throw stuff out of the car at the hounds? And why’s he running anyway? Lots here to think about – well done.
I think throwing a cardboard sign at the hounds would only slow Stu down 🙂
Ahh, a cliffhanger! I want to know what happens to Stu now and why he’s running so I can either hope for him to escape or get caught! I liked this story a lot and I think it’s because in the midst of all his turmoil Stu took a few seconds to ponder the origin and meaning of the sign. That little bit just made the story come alive for me.
If the police end up catching him in that thing, they’ll be telling the story for years! Good job.
And they may not be believed 🙂