Once again Wednesday, and a new picture to write a story on. This week it’s a wonderful picture from Beth Carter (who of course own all rights to the picture). The story is part two of the letter by Jennifer to John. Check it out if you want to here.
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Copyright Beth Carter
Jennifer,
I have delayed sending a response for a few weeks. As you might understand your letter disrupted the quiet life I had settled in. I have now left everything, sold the house, left my work and forsaken the town I learned to love… just because of you.
I left no forwarding address, and an old car serves as my lodging for a while. I never want to see a white picket fence again. After all, you seduced my only brother Ralph, and then had him killed.
You have served your time, but never try to contact me again.
John
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February 27, 2013
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Love poor John’s reply. Thanks for clearing that up 🙂
We’ll see… maybe Jennifer is not giving up.
Oh, I do hope so. She sounds like a nasty piece of work. Bit crazy, too?
few typos if you don’t it mentioned: ”…left the town I learned ‘to’ love …”
and ”you have served ‘your’ time …”
Else made me laugh.
Thank you for pointing that out. Wrote the story in a hurry
Labouring over my own right now. And made a typo in my comment too I see!
why not just run her over?
Maybe he prefer to run away from jail time.
Such an ice cold tone in the writer’s voice… well done.
Probably ice-cold straight from his heart.
I’m so glad he stood up to her!
After killing his brother .. yeah I think that was the only way. But I’m not sure she will accept
Great continuation!
Thank you 🙂
How terribly sad
Really sad I agree
“I never want to see a white picket fence again. ” really felt his pain there. hmph i knew it, she was a bee-yotch >< real sad
Fortunately John knew as well.
Great line – in an idea I really liked very much – “I never want to see a white picket fence again” there is dark humour and futility in that line…
I have had this story in my head since last week, and the picture was just perfect. That line I wanted to have already then.
Nicely done. Love how you tied it into the car.
Denmother
Thank you. It was so easy to write, as it fitted the answering letter from last week.
She sounds like a crazy. Better lose the house than get near her again. Very nicely written.
I think she is a downright lunatic. Yes, very very dangerous (I think she know a few tricks what you can do with that white picket fence)
Whoa! That was harsh! Probably best that way – no mixed signals.
Maybe i should say ‘blunt’ rather than harsh.
And I like the way you made it sound like he was going back to her, then boom! 🙂
Yes, a few hints early on… but I like to do boom 🙂
Well said !!!
Thank you 🙂
Sounds like he’s better off. Good job.
I hope so, better live in an old car somewhere than with Jennifer.
Great job on the prompt. Wonderful tie-in with the old car and I, too, loved the white picket fence reference. Glad you liked my pic!
It was a wonderful picture, and it fitted perfect with the story I already had in my head.
Well done. I like his straightforward tone, and the hint of… Can it be dry humor? “After all, you seduced my only brother…”
I think there is a some dark humor there, as well as in the white picket fence.
Well, that didn’t go as I thought it would. I had to back and read Jennifer’s letter (I liked that story last week) and I was sure he was heading straight to her… wrong. Perfect take on this photo, Björn.
Thank you.. I always want a little twist. Hopefully we can let John and Jennifer rest a little while now.
Sounds as if he has severed all ties to his past life…however–he answered her letter. There may be more to this story next week?
We’ll see, all of the sudden it feels like I have all kind of stories developing here, but I might want to try something else too..
Interesting response… (I took a look at last week’s piece.)
He sounds too ’emotionally attached’ to be able to leave ‘well enough alone’. Think this story may well continue…! 😉
We’ll see. Depends, I have a few ideas bubbling in my head.
Great job! 🙂
Thank you 🙂
Dear Björn,
The perfect sequel to last week’s story. Concise and well written. Good job!
Shalom,
Rochelle
Thank you … 🙂 Picture was a perfect fit to a story I already had in my head.
I get “cold” from this. It’s clinical and sort of dry on purpose, dead pan. There’s a lot of hate in that letter from John. I think if she ever came near him, he’d kill Jennifer.
I think she is manipulative enough to be prepared…
Maybe John will end up dead if he tried.
that guy has more patience than anyone should ever have. well done.
Probably Jennifer had some kind of lure to attract both brothers.
damn vixen!
I think I had Cathy Ames from East of Eden at the back of my head.
Well I wondered about the other half of the story. Now i know he has given up on her due to her treachery. A nice compliment piece Bjorn.
I’m not sure that there are any more gaps to fill 🙂
Oh, so wicked!
Scott
Mine: http://kindredspirit23.wordpress.com/2013/02/27/friday-fictioneers-312013-xxxx-genre-humorous/
I am hoping there will be prologue to this story. Perhaps in the coming weeks…
She sounds more iritating than poison ivy. Even if prison did rehabiliate her, you can’t get over having your brother murdered. I like the way you continued the story, Bjorn.
A cold, sad and angry tale, Bjorn, but nicely written. An interesting take on the prompt.
enjoyed the continuation from last week. nice job
Oh! I didn’t foresee this last week when I read the first letter.
Very interesting!
Is there a prequel to last week as well?
a good continuation from the previous one..no wonder John doesn’t want to see her..Looking to see more in the coming weeks:)
A fantastic two-parter Bjorn. I love that there was so much more to the story than was apparent the first week. It sounds like he knows he has to get out quick before she comes after him 🙂
What a tale! Give me letter No. 3.
Very nice. Just take everything and leave behind the pain. Great job.
Well that biatch!
I have a feeling Jen is not done with that family yet. I liked the cold touch of his letter
Poor John being dragged back to a terrible time. Hope we see more of this saga
good one — but does he have wireless and facebook ?
Hi Bjorn,
I enjoyed your continued story, and I think telling it through letters is an effective way to do it. I’m wondering what will happen next. Ron
and a great response back to Jennifer! she must have witch powers of something…hope John stays strong and she does not cast another spell on him. ugh.
Just perfect … succinct and to the point! Nice!
Wow, Bjorn. What a haunting tale. Jennifer deserves no sympathy. Imaginative take on the prompt.
Reading the comments it looks like I arrived in the middle of an ongoing story. Having started with this entry, it sounds like John is clearing the air and putting his own thoughts to rest which is good, however I can’t help but want to read the story of Jennifer and Ralph so I hope that’s upcoming!
Last week I wrote the first letter from Jennifer to John. There is a link back at the top of my entry… Not the whole story but part of it.
Well done on using the car to continue last week’s story. I expect now she’ll stalk him. If you keep writing instalments on this, you’ll end up with a novel! And a captive audience waiting to buy it when it’s published! Ann
ooo very good carry over. Might be a longer short fiction in the making
Smart guy (btw)
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I’m not sure I like you choice of name, Bjorn! Jennifers are nice people 😉
A but now Jennifer is nice… Last week was a lot worse.
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