Hello Friday Fictioneers!
For those of you, who do not take part in the Friday Fictioneers blog group, please accept this as an invitation. Every Wednesday we are provided with a photo and the goal is to offer a short story using 100 words. This task is the true challenge and I find it very inspiring reading the other members view on the photo prompt.
Each participate then have the opportunity to review, comment, and/or provide constructive criticism. Therefore we live, learn, and improve. Come join and have some fun!
Rochelle Wisoff-Fields is the host and on her behalf I extend a welcome to all participants.
Copyright-Claire Fuller
“My mind is captured by thoughts of her. I can smell her perfume and hear her voice. What do I do?”
“Tom, I have known you since grade school. Who are you talking about?”
“The woman from my dreams; she comes and visit almost every night.”
“What does she say?”
“’Hold me’ and then I grab her and love instantly permeates.”
Doorbell rings.
“Hey Tom, this is my cousin Sara from Tennessee.”
Standing in shock and shaken. Can this really be the woman from my dreams?
She approaches, “Have we met before?”
I can’t blow this now! What’s next?
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Comments on: "Her Entrance" (29)
He’s already blowing it!!!
This is what I truly hoped for – communication between the males and females. Good point.
you got it, that moment when the guy freezes up, and instead of smiling and taking her hand briefly and welcoming her, looks at her like a deer in the headlights and says, “uhhh, uhhh:….
He’s thinking too hard instead of reacting to her question.. Should start with the Hello.. 🙂 Nice story in form of a conversation.
Thanks. He is so caught up in his dream.
LOL! Acting like a shcoolboy on his first date, tongue tied. Good story 🙂 http://readinpleasure.wordpress.com/2013/02/01/fridayfictioneers-janus
LOL….to capture the moment if there is ever such a thing as love at first sight…Thanks for visiting.
Good luck to him. I don’t think he’s blown it. It all depends on what he does next. This was an enjoyable story.
janet
Thank you Janet. His next move can determine his future outcome.
I have a feeling he will blow it if he follows the script of his dream: “…I grab her and love instantly permeates”. I suspect he’ll kick dust for a moment and hope the mutual attraction takes hold. Good luck, Tom.
Thanks for stopping by. My hopes is that he will get it together even if he makes a sloppy entrance. Hopeless romantic that I am.
Neat tale, well done.
Thanks for stopping by.
awww wouldn’t it be awesome to experience something like that.. just knowing from the start that one great love that you’re destined to be with… very nice story 🙂
Every female dream. Thanks for visiting.
Dear YJ,
This is a pleasant piece. I enjoyed it. A couple of practical things. I believe it should be “‘Hold me’ and then…” because Tom is quoting his dream girl. I hope he’ll use some common sense and not blow his chances. 😉
Shalom,
Rochelle
Thanks Rochelle! I will make that update shortly. Peace to you.
Dear YJ,
Welcome aboard. A good story with a hook at the end. Will he blow it? Or will love permeate?
Aloha,
Doug
Thanks Doug. Participating is a real treat to me. I also get to meet everyone. I would hope love prevails.
All lost – both relationships are shattered…. Maybe she turns out to be an awful voice, with a cackling laughter…. But otherwise
That would be an excellent twist. Thanks for visiting.
Wow, nice one. Hope he regains his composure before she thinks him an idiot lol.
I would expect him to do so. Thanks for stopping by.
Interesting. I love dream stories. I think there’s something to dreams.
I agree with you. Thank you for stopping by.
Aw, you create a mystery here with the dreams, and yet a real-life situation we can all relate to in his tongue-tied silence when she arrives. If I could offer one concrit, it would be that a couple of lines sound like exposition – in particular “I’ve known you since grade school”. It doesn’t feel entirely like realistic conversation between two old friends.
But that’s a polishing point – I think you have a great story here, or the opening to something bigger if you wanted to go that way.
Ah, but has he been in her dreams? Better go slow! I like your use of the prompt – the man in the sculpture does have a kind of dreaming expression, doesn’t he?
He does. He appears to be wrapped in her love. Thanks for visiting and commenting.
This is a sweet story. he knows who she is and it stuns him. Hopefully she will see this and reciprocate the love.